Simile Portrait Poems

In our writers workshop we have been working on making our writing more exciting to read. We have done this in several different ways. We have used adjectives, show not tells, and similes. We spent quite some time focusing on similies so we decided to write a portrait poem using only similes. The students were told to choose any person that they wanted to; but they had to be a real person not fictitious. We did this activity line by line and then I checked over them and had the kids polish their poems. Here are the results of that activity:

Hannah
My friend Lizzie
Her eyes are as blue as the sea.
Her hair is as dirtty blond as a horse.
Her laugh is like a baby kittenz meow.
Her hug is like a cuddly bear.
Her voice is like a bunny.
When I'm with Lizzie I feel like a happy bunny.

Parker
My Mom
Her eyes are as green as the grass.
Her hair is as dirty blond as a horse.
Her laugh is like a screm.
Her hugs are like a peguin.
Her voice is like a mellow song.
When I'm with my mom I feel like the best ever.

Brittany
My Mommy
Her eyes are as green as leavs.
Her hair is as brown as fuge.
Her laugh is like a hienu.
Her hugs are like a soft panda.
Her voice is like com music.
When I'm with my mommy I feel like a happy mushroom.

Chloe
My frend Cathren
Her eyes are as blue as the sea.
Her hair is as yellow as a sunflower.
Her laugh is like a meyow.
Her hgs are like a big pelow.
Her vice is like a pincec.
When I'm with her I feel like a donut.

Austin
My frind Ryan
His eyes are as as green as grass.
His hair is as soft as a bare.
His laugh is like a mostr.
His hugs are like a bare.
His voice is like a pagwen.
When I'm with Ryan I feel like I am cool.

Kyle
My baby brother Ryan
His eyes are as blue as the oshin.
HIs hair is as yellow as a lemen.
His laugh is like a dog.
His hugs are like a bunny.
His voice is like a big bare graling.
Wen I'm with Ryan I feyl like the luckyist persin.

Peyton
My freind Alex
His eyes are as brown as brownise.
His hair is as thick as metle.
His laugh is like a sighern.
His hugs are like gooy fuge.
His voice is like a mad football player.
When I'm with Alex I feel like skwooshy mushrooms.

Matthew
My brother Nathaniel
His eyes are as brown as mud puddles.
His hair is as black as the midnight sky.
His laugh is like a loud screachy scream.
His hug is like a fuzzy bunny.
His voice is like a bird chirping.
When I'm with Nathaniel I feel like a luckey person.

Jessica R.
My Daddy
His eyes are as hazil as dead grass.
His hair is as scrachy as a tree trunk.
His laugh is like wedding music.
His hugs are like a soft bed.
His voice is like a bird chirping happily.
When I'm with my daddy I feel like I'm the best in the world.

Max
My freind Alin
His eyes are as black as niht.
His hair is as soft as a bed.
His lagh is like a rinceris stomping.
His hug is like a snake stangling me.
His voice is like a raideo in a car vibrating.
When I'm with Alin I feel like a medeor.

Angelina
Mis Bruck
Her eyes are brown as a house.
Her here is as brown as trees.
Her laugh is lowd like a siyrin.
Her voice is like a cute single.
When I am with Mis bruck I fill like the luckeyes porsin to have a a frend that car ubut you.

Jessica S.
Sarah
Her eyes are as brown as a dark teddy bear.
Her hair is as blond as beach sand.
Her laugh is like a beach ocean.
Her hugs are like a soft teddy bear.
Her voice is like birds singing.
When I'm with Sarah I feel like I'm going to berst.

Kendal
My Daddy
His eyes are as blue as the pusifc oshon.
His hair is as soft as a pingns bely.
His laugh is like a doky if he is sleepy.
His hugs are like a big sgwshy pilow.
His voice is likea noml Daddy.
When I'm with my daddy I feel like I am a presepent.

Ellery
My Mommy
Her eyes are as green as grass.
Her hair is as solft as a bunny.
Her laugh is like a kitten.
Her hugs are like a pengin.
Her voice is like a bird chreeping.
When I'm with my mom I feel like a lucky person.

Rebecca
My friend Rayn
Her eyes are as blue as a wale.
Her hair is as yellow as the sunflower.
Her laugh is like a brid.
Her hugs are like a teddy bear.
Her voice is like a sng.
When I'm with Rayn I feel like a priass.

Graham
My brother Griffin
His eyes are as brown as a bear.
His hair is as black as night.
His laugh is funny like a funny bunny.
His hugs are like a rope raped around something.
His voice is like a snake slithering.
When I'm whith my brother I feel like a teenager.

Tavez
Tray
His eyes are as black as me.
His hair is as ugly as died grass.
His lauh is like a perfaser.
His hugs are like a ruberband.
His voice is like a crying baby.
When I'm with Tray I feel like Im going to die.

Vanessa
My sister Samantha
Her eyes are as blue as the sky.
Her hair is as brown as a chocklet bar.
Her laugh is like a kiss.
Her hug is like a suft cudle pilo.
Her voice is like a song.
When I'm with my sister I feel like cute littel sister.

Duncan
My friend Jack
His eyes are as blu as a aqariam.
His hair is as short as a miget.
His laugh is like my webkinz.
His hugs are like a soft doggy.
His voice is like a scream.
When I am with Jack I feel like a made.